Board Thread:Roleplay/@comment-27120173-20170902030229/@comment-27344811-20170906150218

(Okay, I wasn't gonna say anything, but....)

(1. Malware is the primary antagonist. People shouldn'tve been stronger than him from the start. It sems to early for Angela and Zarita to be stronger than him. Like, seriously? He's THE MAIN ANTAGONIST. We're focusing too much on Angela and Mettaton. Speaking of..)

(2. Melanie. Don't get me wrong, I LOVE self-insertion. But... you're having them be a god and control your characters. That's, as I said, a little overwhelming compared to Malware. She's not in her terriory, she shouldn't be that strong.)